Daybreak

Daybreak on Hyperion is an original light novel story written by Aorii.


Story Synopsis

Born into noble prestige and gifted with genius intellect, Pascal was a promising officer cadet who rose to national fame before even graduating. At the mere age of nineteen, he had everything a young man could wish for...

Except his habitual arrogance had destroyed every opportunity of a close friendship.

Seeking a companion that would meet his protracted list of requirements, Pascal decided to craft the 'perfect spell' for the upcoming familiar ceremony. If those in his world were not fit to accompany his brilliance, then he would summon a best friend through his own hands -- one that was mature, intelligent, knowledgeable, bright, and cute to boot.

He received far more than he bargained for.

This is the story of how three wills -- adviser, general, and sovereign -- joined to forever alter a continent.

  • Genre: Fantasy, Adventure, Genderbender, Action, Military (Strategy), Politics, Romance (Slow)
  • Author: Aorii
  • Illustrator: Chuz (retired); see Fan Artwork
  • Editors/Betareaders: Terisxenite (retired), Phoenix, Kadi, Ahmsab, Wu, Himeko, Skychan

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    1. AoriiAorii

      My apologies ^^'
      I had meant to release this chapter along with the one after... then life happened (mess with car repairs that ended with it being totalled)

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    1. krytykkrytyk Post author

      Aoooo~rii-kun. This guy here^ mailed me asking for permission to translate Daybreak. I replied to wait for reply in the comments.

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          1. AoriiAorii

            Oh Hi, sorry I thought I had replied to this already. Apparently not ;_;
            But feel free to translate if you wish; there's already a branch project in Baka-Tsuki in Spanish

            Just forward me a link to where you posted it so I know =P
            If the email you entered in comment is the real one, I can also contact you through there.

      1. hayazi96

        they left you hanging a bit, though it's only a few days, but still. oh, and thanks for this story, it has (though a different genre) helped with making me write my own story. it was also an influence by another writer I was speaking with Terror Infinity B Side Author. Man that guy's story is good, only has that Royal Road Grammar problem, but the story and amount of chapters sure as hell make up for it. if your interested at all, mine is on RRL ' Peerless daughter of Heaven ' but, I'm only 4 chapters in and I'm already re-writing absolutely everything. or to be more specific, putting a ton meat on top of the bones that were empty.

        thanks to you causing the scale to tip slightly, and Wellsford doubling the attacks effect, I now have a story actually online instead of just on paper or my hard drive. thank you.

        Hope Daybreak continues soon, but if not soon, at the same great quality of a story you can smash into my mind, that you have been.

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        1. AoriiAorii

          It's really tempting for any writer to just rewrite and rewrite because we're never satisfied xD But my personal experience is that you should at least finish one arc / volume before rewriting, otherwise you'll never get things finished ^^'

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  1. Timewreck25

    Hey Aorii, I would like to be a beta editor for Daybreak, if you're looking for one currently, or even an extra one if need be. I am quite well versed in editing English works, and I was considering writing a series of novels myself for some time, but decided against it for reasons related to publishing to be honest. Please let me know if you are interested by email..

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  2. Ranon

    I just thought of something. (just finished volume 2) The princess mentioned she had some sort of memory projector when she was grilling Pascal about Kaede. Why don't they just hook Kaede up to this projector so they can see Earth through her memories?

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    1. AoriiAorii

      Because they're busy with other things =P
      That'll happen at some point. But at the moment, #Priorities

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  3. Nyururin

    Came back after 7 months still no yuri action (just me getting my hopes up for nothing) :(

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  4. Hachi

    Hello Aorii, I've been following your work since Volume 3 chapter 8. Honestly, it's been a long time since I've enjoyed a novel as much as I have yours. The amount of work you put into it really shows, and every time you pull in politics and history you really nail it (greatly pleasing my inner historian.) This novel is one of my favorites and I always look forward to new chapters. Because I'm such a fan, I couldn't resist drawing some fanart while waiting between chapters.
    http://chiaki888.deviantart.com/art/Daybreak-on-Hyperion-Kaede-618732715
    http://chiaki888.deviantart.com/art/Daybreak-621937861

    Your honest opinion is always appreciated. Hopefully I haven't butchered your beautiful Kaede too much.
    Please keep up the hard work on this fantastic piece of literature!

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    1. AoriiAorii

      Since v3ch8? Jeez, what a chapter that was to go on, first major bipolar switch...

      But wow, I'm actually really impressed with the first one. Your basic techniques are very solid -- which I really appreciate. There's nothing too flashy or eyecatching, but everything just feels so natural.
      Nice touch with the shadows under her eyes on the 2nd one =o Weird bend at the knees though (but seriously, only manga artists are used to drawing those poses xD)
      Now if you want a few picks:
      -- For a uniform, her waist is a little loose. Her height looks fine since the feet are cut off, but if I consider where the knees are, the waist-to-knee proportions are a little weird ^^'
      -- Do wish you used more black lines on the uniform. The pink around her collars/shoulders is fantastic; the rest blends in too much against a white background. The skirt could also use some black borders. Overshirt is probably too long, but hey, hard to make that part look natural.
      -- She does wear a tie (before the Knight's Cross) and dress shirt (folded down collars) underneath. White stockings and gloves from her undergarments show... mmh okay now I'm getting too picky xD (too much time spent on clothing design lol!)

      Will be adding this to the art page (when I get time); unless you mind =3

      Also, nice Robert x Kaede strips xD (further comments on that there)

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      1. Hachi

        I don't mind at all ^^ Thanks for the full uniform description; now I can draw my fan art more accurately! Oh you saw those Robert x Kaede strips? (blushes) I'm a tad embarrassed xD Thanks so much for the feedback. Now when I'm having Daybreak withdrawals between chapters I have a full description to use. Also I don't blame you for being picky, when someone works hard on something--whether clothing design or continuity for your novel's universe--they want to see it honored.

        Chapter 8 was a ride for sure. Honestly I sympathize with both Kaede and Sylv; neither one asked for the circumstances they have to live with. And that's what makes your novel stand out; everything is considered with great care and all the characters are not two dimensional cardboard cutouts of stereotypes or clichés. Thus, I'm watering at the mouth for this volume's plot. Man, oh man, Edith's coup is gonna be something else.

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    2. Nyururin

      What tool did you use? I usually use paint tool sai after scanning my drafts or art flow on tab to do the whole thing

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  5. doominator10

    Sweet baby Jesus first Antimagic's back and now more chapters of Daybreak?! What a time to be alive.

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  6. hsamhweel

    As a samaran, kaede has near-white hair and almost-red eyes. Does she and Illyasviel Von Einzbern look alike?

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    1. Hakurei06Hakurei06

      honestly. She has pink eyes and is samaran, so her features would probably be somewhere between Mongolian and Russian, if I recall. Japanese features may have also carried over.

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    2. AoriiAorii

      This is as close as I can find to give you an impression of the color combo:
      https://yande.re/post/show/340664
      The eyes are close enough, a shade darker than Kaede's, but natural when you consider lighting filter in the picture.
      Ignore the ribbons, and the hairstyle fits too. So does the expression.
      Just not the helpless looking pose. Classic male catering, that xD

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  7. Averyderpycatfish

    It keeps telling me 'You Are Banned' when I try to read the next volume... This is unfortunate as I sincerely enjoy this delightful series. Kaede, and Pascal have much better chemistry than the familiar- mage set in my own work. I love what Aorii is doing here, though I prefer to write tragedies, and could not hope to approach this level of military writing.

    This may be rather an odd question as well, but since they spoke of 'celestial dominion' or such in respect to the jurisdiction of gods, do souls differ between worlds? Certainly cultural viewpoints have been known to make cultures even of the same species (here I am regarding denizens of other worlds as another species as they exist under different physical laws despite genetic, or social similarities. Though I do not mean to offend) And while souls in our world are something Pastafarians such as Kaede may find as debatable as traditional depictions of pirates there is the clear question -since magic is a manifestation of one's will.
    Souls that cannot use magic, (and in face occur in a existence where the very basic laws of reality appear to be drastically different in function, if not in form)

    Are they different in any meaningful way? I do not believe in gods, but I do believe that reality has a twisted sense of justice. Thusly It seems off that one group would lack such a power without capability given to make them equal.
    Sorry for the philosophical rant but I really need to ask this.

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    1. AoriiAorii

      uh, "You Are Banned" through what link? I wasn't aware wordpress was even capable of that, and vol2/3 is definitely working fine.
      Since nobody truly understands what a soul really is (even biblical books handwave it), trying to explain any details would be impossible =P

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    2. krytykkrytyk Post author

      Your ban is most likely a glitch (since I would have to manually insert someone's IP), but I disabled my ban plugin for now, try again.

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  8. Azuki

    Mhm, this will probably come off as rambling as I just type down my thoughts of what I want to try to say. I've only read Vol.1 btw.

    I think the writing is really good, better than almost all traditional LN. The realistic feeling behind most characters gives me an eerie feeling, that this could be how our world would look like if magic did exist. I won't dawdle too much into everything here as I've only really seen the noble perspective. And their ultimate trio of privilege thru ~magic, status and money~. While I would like to punch a smug nobleman/woman's face in to vent frustration of the unfairness in the world. It wouldn't solve the issue, it would most likely make the issue worse as 'the commoner girl is going savage, typical of commoners' and so on. So the high road would be the better way to solve the issue but standing firm in the belief of; Well, for starters: Standardized Education. Which was mentioned and I hope it gets more evolved.
    __
    I do like the way the genderbending is done in this story, unlike so many other stories~~, the way they either go super girlish almost instantly in an almost ridiculous way or go the whole "IMMA MAN" route and go super macho and tomboy. So it's breath of fresh air to see someone -Not do that- but subtle but steady towards a natural transition to feminine.
    __
    However what did bother me, is the whole familiar contract. The very one-sided benefits of Master & Familiar. The Master can take anything whenever, if he wills it, (doesn't seem like you can resist it except physical violence). While the familiar just has to rely on his good grace not to abuse his power. That isn't a beneficial contract but enslavement. Other series have depicted familiars feeding off the master's emotion/soul/magic/whatever-they-call-it as a means for survival and/or personal growth in the spirit/Celestial realm in exchange the Master gets direct access to the magical/etheral/whatever-they-call-it plane for more magical power.

    The second part of the problem is the invastion of privacy with the ability to feel their familiars emotion. I get it's an empathic bond to make the master more willing to treat their familiar with grace than malice. I feel like it should go both ways, because in that case, the familiar can also better serve the master. Since a familiar is technically suppose to understand his/hers master better than his loved ones due to the spirit bond they have.

    And I'm not telling you how to write your story and how your magic system should work. Nor am I an authority on magic and familiars, it's just that's how I think a better contract with a spirit/familiar should work.

    At the very least, I want to know more in-depth how your familiar system works and why they(the mages) would even bother with it in the first place. And why any familiar ever accept becoming one.
    __

    P.S Kingdom of Västergötland, did you call it that due to the backstory you made.
    Or did you do a mistake with the name and then made a backstory for it due to sudden inspirational muse ? ^^

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    1. AoriiAorii

      Thanks for your detailed thoughts; and I'm glad you've enjoyed it thus far.

      @Familiars: I actually just established the familiar based on traditional fantasy RPG rules, which of course was never meant for a 'sentient being' as familiar. Is it slavery? Well yes, in the same way that a pet dog is a slave. What does a familiar get out of it? Well, an animal who doesn't have to hunt in the wild will speak of guaranteed food sources, shelter, medical services, etc., not to mention the benefits of obtaining the master's magic which boost longevity if nothing else. But a human spoiled by the stability of civilized society (instead of having to fend for ourselves in the wilderness)? Much harder to see the benefits =P

      Makes you think about the lives of pets, doesn't it?

      @Vastergotland: Was it intended from the start or did I keep it because I thought it made for a good backstory? I honestly can't remember. Maybe a mix of both: stumbled across it, found it cool sounding, looked it up and realized calling it 'west' instead of 'east gotland' was more interesting xD

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      1. Azuki

        I did get the understanding, that familiar were just meant to be a traditional RPG and usually based around non-sentient creatures or just celestial entities with no sense of self. And I was thinking very specific of Kanade's case and What If scenarios if another idiot wanted to try to summon a human as a familiar instead of an animal creature.

        However! It was quite late at night when I started reading and what triggered my mind was when Kanade said "It could be much worse" or in those lines that's when I starting thinking of 1600's America where slavery was fairly common and black people were considered sub-human and were only protected by their master's name. And female slaves, at least the most attracting ones became a plaything for the master and was treated kindly in exchange for diffferent sort of favors. But let's push that aside because I know that was clearly not the intent. So when the professor was "You're barely above property" I thought "holy shit this is really really dark stuff!"

        Anyways~~ since she has been recongnized as a human by the state. Unless Pacals father's death and the incoming war will impact that. (I hope not or it would be devastatingly depressing). As even if she is a familiar to Pacal, he can't really treat her however he want now. As Kanade would be protected by human's rights. She could still be punished obviously as any servant of any noble house could be. But it wouldn't be inhuman punishment. Especially since she's probably one of the more extraordinary magic events in their (recent) history.

        Ending on... (Well, not really...) As others have mentioned, how Pacals isn't the best Battle-mage/Spellsword. It's a really nice chance of pace from the traditional LN when OP-character is OP even if he is called 'worst of the worst' magic caster he would still win... .urggh >.< Hate those stories.
        While he is called 'Runemaster' I don't really feel like he really understand the full potentional of instant, non-verbal spells. They are not suppose to be used in rapid succession like a machine gun(like he did vs Reynald but he used buffs still the same). That would make you lose easily vs anyone who's prepared for it (Which he did).
        Since I don't know the magic system of either Aura nor Rune and how they work in details in your mind. But I did get a massive feeling that Rune magic is taking inspiration from Vancian magic. (Since he literally have to prepare the ring for spells he remembers later to add later on. And the limited activation of all the spells that he can prepare on Kanade's forearms)

        I'll probably give another update once I've read Vol.2 since I've read it was going to be more combat focused (Duh, it's a war incoming) it will be fun to see how the magic work more. Maybe I was wrong about Vancian Magic system! Anyway~~ it's midsummer on saturday. Wooohoo. Let's dance around the midsommarstång!

        See ya another time~

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        1. AoriiAorii

          Gosh what's with people calling Kaede 'Kanade'? (you're not the first to do this) It's like talking to someone while constantly being called the wrong name ^^'

          Magic system gets explained more in vol.2. Rune magic is based on the mythology surrounding nordic runes (but yes, it's "prepared" magic). If there's a non-quantitative advantage to prepared magic, I don't know of it. Its inflexibility pretty much caught the short end of the stick in every way.

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  9. Jessigurl

    Vol 3, Ch 2:
    "Not since her birth. I'm not that old."

    "I didn't mean it like that!" Kaede almost squeaked out, which only pulled down an amused smile from Sylviane.

    "Mari is a childhood friend, only six years older than me," the Princess explained. "She's been my guard since I was seven, albeit still in training back then."

    "I started only a few months before that incident."

    Despite her level voice, there was a strong sense of guilt and shame buried beneath Mari's words, which Sylviane certainly did not miss:

    "There's hardly any need for you to remember that every time, Mari," came a soothing, if not forgiving voice. "You were eleven, facing off against Weichsel's best. It would be unrealistic to expect any more of yourself back then."

    Is it just me or are people from Rhin-Lotharingie bad at math? Sylv being 7 at the time of her capture should make Mari 13, not 11 if they are 6 years apart in age.
    Other than that, love the story :)

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    1. AoriiAorii

      lol, I can't believe nobody noticed that until now xD
      Wouldn't even make sense for an eleven year old to be in that position. Thirteen: sure, they start becoming squires at that age. Editted.
      Thanks

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  10. Illparazzo

    For some reason every time I read about Pascal I see Lelouch Lamperouge / vi Britannia. More experienced and wiser, but still the same pompous asshole ;)

    And of course I looove your books ^^

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    1. AoriiAorii

      Lulu is wayyyyy better at managing his social affairs though =P
      If nothing else, he has no problem making friends in his school persona.

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      1. Steele

        really? his whole solution is to kill himself and trust that everyone will be satisfied with his death, and forget everything they lost. god forbid they every trust another leader.

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        1. Hakurei06Hakurei06

          Not saying you're wrong, but he did come up with that after the mental breakdown that ensued from Nunnaly's apparent death. Not to mention the loss of Shirley.

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        2. AoriiAorii

          Season 1 has Lulu actually given consistent characterization.
          Season 2 was written by 2chan =P (as entertaining as it was; but don't think about it too hard or you'll start to notice massive holes, especially towards the ending)

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          1. Himeko Inaba

            I miss those threads, they were better than the show itself. I sincerely hope for another chan-sourced anime of that scale again.

  11. darius4x

    HI Aorii,
    I have just finished the 1st volume, and I have to say .. it rocked my head .. :) ..
    Thank you so much for it .. I love it ..
    Is it already possible to purchase it somewhere or it is only the internet version there .. ?
    I’m a total google mushroom so I don’t find stuff often .. :) .. anyhow .. do you have some webpage with donation info’s ..?
    I would like to support you, even if I cannot afford to send much, but I really appreciate your work.

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    1. AoriiAorii

      Thanks ^^
      No I haven't published it or started up a Patreon or anything like that. I keep thinking about putting it out for publishing, but keep finding myself to busy to get to it (while still maintaining an update schedule). Part of me is also afraid that putting a monetary value to Daybreak might make me enjoy writing it less...

      If you'd like to support, the best way to do it right now is simply to get involve in this community... and help spread the word =3

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      1. darius4x

        Hi Aorii,

        I have already spread it to around 11 people .. :-) ..
        if there is anything else I can help with, just let me know ..
        .. :-) .. I will be glad to help.

        darius4x

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  12. Zentirium

    Please update again soon, Aorii! The gaps between updates are harsh at times...

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      1. AoriiAorii

        Probably not going to happen for another two weeks, sorry.
        I've been spending too much time playing a giant spacefaring mushroom (Stellaris) rather than working on the next chapter ^^'

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          1. krytykkrytyk Post author

            You're getting a little spoiled here, wait patiently until Aorii's done :3.

          2. AoriiAorii

            Ch10 just entered beta last night; so should be less than a week now P=

        1. Zentirium

          I think I may have a bit of a problem at the pace I've been going through translation sites... Please release the next chapter soon!!!

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  13. Kelossalas

    Hello Aorii I just found this story a few days ago and wanted to give my thoughts. I for one really enjoy this story so far. You make the characters feel alive and have them react to their circumstances based on their character. Kaede has to be my favorite so far, ever since that emotional outburst at Pascal in the first volume i was hooked! (I reread that part three times.) I also love how much detail you've put into her transformation into a different gender. It is a constant through the story and helps build her character even more. Each character is well thought out and given their time to shine which is nice. You never have a character that feels like that boring trope of OP protagonist who carries the world on their shoulders. Your world building so far has been great and it gives a nice sense of scale as well. Nothing comes off as shallow or tacked on either. Your visualization of the characters is great in my opinion, being able to imagine what the characters look like is half the fun.

    The character progression also feels very fluid and pleasant to read. Getting to know Pascal's character after the first impression was most enjoyable. The battles are also well done with plenty of visualization to give the reader a clear picture of what is going on. (If I i ever learn how to draw this will be one of the stories i'd like to give a go at.)

    The only qualm i have (This is just my opinion) is that the exposition gets a bit heavy sometimes. While it does wonders for world building it kinda slows things down a bit. However it has been placed at the correct times which is great. Such as it mostly being done at meetings or in transit to someplace. (Don't want to fall into those pitfalls that happen in some anime where a villain falls into a trap and the protagonist explains it to them for ten minutes then goes back to the action.)

    I hope to see much more of this story over the years. It's most assuredly one of my favorites I've read so far. I just hope you don't lose enthusiasm for it. This is a REALLY good read and I hope you realize that. You have done a great job so far and should be proud! Honestly thank you for making this. Glad i picked up reading light novels late last year for sure now.

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    1. AoriiAorii

      Glad you're enjoying it o/
      I try to break up the exposition pieces and build them around important discussions. But yeah... tastes may vary. Some of the heavier exposition scenes were actually written because people kept demanding for details ^^'

      As someone who really hates the OP protagonist trend so I do try my best to make sure it doesn't happen. That being said, I feel like I'm already encountering the problem of too many characters with not enough screentime for everyone xD Working on dealing with this.

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      1. Kelossalas

        I suppose that comes with the territory of having so many characters you want to flesh out. In my opinion Reynald and Parzifal haven't gotten too much of the spotlight for awhile. Other than that it seems to be flowing quite well. The main cast has definitely had alot of development so far so it's fun seeing them interact with the other characters and each other.

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        1. Hakurei06Hakurei06

          It's not quite there yet, but if the cast grows to the point where the spotlight becomes a scarce and precious commodity, there is a war going on...

          When the text weaves unwieldily, are loose threads not shorn, lest they snag and tear?

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        2. AoriiAorii

          Reynald is fairly fleshed out already so I don't have to spend too much time on characterizing him; so I can just pull him in at leisure ^^
          Parzifal, on the other hand, is hard. His character is meant to be the type that blends into the background 99% of the time, and only in a rare opportunity would he stand out -- which is hard to find.
          But of course, those are Pascal's side's supporting charas. It's Sylv's side that I'm having more trouble breaking in ^^' (Robert, Elspeth, and now Edith)

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          1. Kelossalas

            (I don't mean to put ideas in your head as I do not want to demean your writing) I'm almost surprised Parzifal hasn't put some time aside to pull Kaede aside to tutor her on the basics of first aid at least due to her blood. (Although I imagine he's a bit worked ragged due to helping with the war effort.) Wouldn't she make quite the healer if Pascal gave her some runes to use to heal others with while under Parzifal's guidance?

          2. AoriiAorii

            I think it's either been he's busy or she's busy up until now... and the fact First Aid is one of those point-and-click spells.
            Almost I know next to nothing about biomed xD

          3. Kelossalas

            It's a really interesting subject to study. I took quite a few med classes in college so far and you'd be surprised what the human body can recover from in the right conditions. (I dunno if i can post this or not due to spoilers if not please remove the comment if you'd like) Kaede being on that rock in the latest chapter for so long would have actually broken down the tissue on the parts where the rock was jagged down to the bone. Pretty scary stuff, but i'll just use her healing factor as a way to get past that bit!

      2. Erios

        Aori you stop of writting this?, I got a time reading this but the chapter 10 don't show up.
        I only want to know

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        1. AoriiAorii

          Next chapter is going to be delayed, sorry.
          I've been too busy using my spare time to play a giant spacefaring, world-conquering mushroom.

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  14. Kisuke

    If pascal and Kaede don't end up together im going to be disappointed. That's why I don't like Sylv. I know it's petty but there is my two cents

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    1. Hakurei06Hakurei06

      If Pascal and Sylv don't get together, I'd be entirely surprised. I do believe that they truly love each other and intend to put their best efforts in maintainimg their relationship, however dysfunctional. Whatever position that leaves Kaede, I doubt she would do anything against that for both their own sake, or their nations.

      Well, no matter how things turn out on that front, I doubt it'll be anything but interesting.

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          1. Hakurei06Hakurei06

            Will Samara feature a Secretary or Chairman Andropov?

            "The struggle for human rights is a part of a wide-ranging imperialist plot to undermine the foundation of the Samaran Republic"

          2. kisuke

            Not my cup of tea I don't like yuri/yaoi. Nothing against it I just don't like reading it.

          3. krytykkrytyk Post author

            Well, I don't like Yaoi, but cute girls doing cute yuri isn't bad. As long as its fiction.

          4. Steele

            well... it a waste gb material, always disappointing when they wind up doing what they would have done anyways

    2. Anon

      Pascal ain't dropping sylv, both because of personal and political reasons, as for kaede dunno, they're gonna have to work something out.

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      1. dragonelete

        i dont know about that personally if i were in pascals shoes i would have dropped her the instant she tried to take control of my familiar away from me. and possibly end up completely ignoring her existence which for someone like her being completely ignored like that would prolly cause her to have a mental breakdown.

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  15. Mizura

    Wow, I didn't realize at first that you were the one writing it, so I was wondering why this story is so much more detailed than... just about all Japanese light novels, really. I only realized this when I went looking for cover illustrations. xD A lot of research has obviously gone into the politics, weaponry and social conducts of different times, and a decent amount of thought into societal aspects and how the presence of magic would affect warfare and its technological development. On the downside, the story gets technical and pretty confusing to read (though part of the blame I guess lies in the fact that I approached it as a light novel at first, so didn't properly sit down to figure out what's what), with lots of characters and lots of military formations. The lack of illustrations (of characters I mean) also makes this quite hard to visualize. I imagine that various outfit designs and perhaps some weapons are based on existing civilizations, so have you thought of including references to illustrations of period outfit etc. to help with the visualization? Probably as part of the National Profiles?

    Also, this story portrays religion in a quite... serious manner. It neither caricatures it as the 'all that is good and light', nor into 'that corrupt bunch of nonsense to be taken down' that is prevailing among light novels. Instead, the characters within the story truly believe in their religions, and although there are obviously many issues with the religious authority, the story interestingly enough doesn't outright state whether the ultimate God exists or not, leaving an uncertainty much like the real world, which I find great.

    Finally, this story actually goes into detail regarding the MC's transformation into a girl, instead of just treating it as a gimmick or running joke. It's also nice that the MC is not the OP center of attention: the other characters are quite competent enough to run their own armies, and even when she brings ideas thanks to her historical knowledge of her own world, implementation is left to others, which makes a lot of sense since there's no way she could deal with all the fine logistics involved in another world. Her plans rarely go so smoothly, either, in the fast-changing environment of a battlefield. Finally, the choice of a Japanese/Russian mixed-blood is a surprisingly interesting one. Usually, when one goes for Western characters, they systematically go for European or U.S.-type characters. However Russia's turbulent recent history makes for a unique perspective.

    Pascal is also a pleasant surprise, as after he gets over the initial douchebaggery, he proves himself to be a surprisingly decent and responsible human being.

    Overall, this is a surprisingly good story. I hate the fact that I discovered it when the latest chapter ended on a cliffhanger. I thought there was one more chapter too. T_T

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    1. AoriiAorii

      Art seems to be a persistent issue here. I do have an artist working on things -- he is just... really slow, since he's busy in real life with other things (and that I'm bit of a perfectionist). That being said, since I didn't design wardrobes based on a particular time period, it's rather hard to simply post a historical image and say "it looks like this".

      I'm actually not satisfied with the portrayal of religion here. If I get time I'd need to go back to vol2 and edit the way Northmen view their gods again. As Pagans, not only would they be polytheistic, but they'd believe that gods walk among men rather than some distant celestial authority figure.

      I do really hate it when main character become the 'OP center of attention', as though the world suddenly revolves around them. It's probably the #1 thing that makes me roll my eyes when reading the young adult genre where this trend is so prevalent.

      A lot of people actually find Kaede 'not Japanese enough' xD -- probably because she's not droning on about Japan's very limited and cloistered history. She's certainly not Russian enough, by my standards. But hey, mix-bloods often form their own identities since they don't fit into their groups, so it's still good.

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      1. Mizura

        Are you mixed too? I'm half-European half-Chinese myself. My Chinese colleagues find me very western, and my Western colleagues find me very Chinese, haha. Don't worry about it. I actually find Kaede, with her emphasis on maintaining social harmony (kind of) to be more Asian than European (I don't know about Russians, but I imagine that they're Quite different culturally from Asians).

        I think many people's impressions of Japanese must have been excessively influenced by anime and light novels. If he's not bringing the joy of the superior rice-based dishes to the European masses, then he ain't Japanese. xD

        It's too bad about the art. For generic light novels the visualisation aid isn't necessary, but your world portrayal is pretty detailed and specific, which makes us readers grasp for visual support more. As for religious portrayal, I didn't pay attention to the details so... for me, it's rather the degree of immersion. As said, the characters take their world and beliefs seriously, which is good worldbuilding.

        Haha, the OP thing is quite annoying. I really enjoy stories that do a good job of portraying a variety of POVs without only one being 'right'. Certainly, it deprives one of the holier-than-thou satisfaction of siding with one who monopolizes all that is right and good and awesome, but such monopoly comes all too often at the price of degrading and insulting the very worldbuilding the story is set in, or the characters that the MC interacts with.

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        1. AoriiAorii

          Yes, I'm a mix (culturally not genetically). So yeah, I can write about growing up in different cultures or through a multilingual environment since I've experienced it myself.
          Russian is weird... as an education video once put it, they're a region "populated by Slavs, ruled by Vikings, educated by Greeks, and divided by Mongols" So as a result their culture is kind of all over the place, and all the ethnic groups they've absorbed during their eastward expansion only made this more diverse. In general, they're more socio-centric and conservative than the west, but nowhere as harmony-obsessed as the far east.

          The problem with most Japanese writers, in my opinion, is they've never gone far outside Japan -- the traditional isolationism and xenophobic tendencies exist as part of their very culture. So it's easy for someone whose never truly experienced what other nations have to offer to claim their own stuff better =P I'm reminded of how Chinese people often mock everyday western cooking like sandwiches and salads when they don't understand there's an art behind it all.

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          1. Mizura

            Whoa, Russia sounds badass. xD

            You should look at the expressions of dismay my Chinese expat colleagues make when they see another sandwich, or conversely their expression of bliss when facing a bowl of hot rice. xD

            So I think on the topic of food matters, it's a little more complicated. Namely, I suspect the habit of Chinese people of only drinking boiled water or eating cooked vegetables may have hygienic origins that have since become culturally ingrained. What's more, I suspect intestinal bacterial flora plays a role. Chinese people who take trips to Europe will have a lot of difficulty digesting dairy products (it is known that Asians often have trouble digesting dairy products, my mom for one) or large quantities of meat at first, for example. When I presented this theory, a Chinese friend of mine realized that it took her a year living in Europe before her dietary habits could match that of a European. Conversely, her European husband complains about how Chinese people aren't open to local cuisine, but swears he'll die if forced to eat say spicy Sichuan cuisine everyday (at which point I rolled my eyes). But it's true that some Chinese local cuisines can send the unprepared into fits of indigestion.

            Basically, I'm not completely sure it's just a matter of traveling or not. Some Chinese people I know went to travel in France, but couldn't stand French cuisine for more than a week before they started holing themselves up in their hotels to eat instant noodles. The stomachs are built differently and takes time to adapt, and even then remembers old habits.

            Which is also why a European would certainly Not fall instantly in love with a daily diet of Asian cuisine. See: my European father living in China who although used to Asian cuisine, also complains about how Asians lack a good appreciation of a good potato.

            All that said, I also don't think the Japanese writers write that way because of a lack of traveling overseas. Rather, it's often a lack of life experience in general. I've noticed before that the manga industry is plagued by 'me too' writers who will write based on what has proven successful with others or quick instant-gratification. It takes work and effort to provide something more than superficial.

          2. AoriiAorii

            There's generally an explanation for everything:
            1. Chinese habits of drinking hot water comes from traditional eastern/chinese medicine, which classifies the drinking of cold water as bad for digestion and has a higher tendency to upset the stomach (depending on what you eat). But apart from that, yeah boiling water and vegetables simply made sense in the older days when hygiene was an issue. This is in stark contract to Europe which went through much of the middle ages with no idea what 'cleanness' meant (in fact, it could attract the inquisition since it was jewish/muslim behavior)
            2. The genetics that most facilitate dairy digestion supposedly originate from North Germanic cultures, so it's not surprising that many more Asians are lactose intolerant -- since you know, not much intermarriages with Germans. Personally, I think it traces back further: many more of Europe's cultures are settled nomads compared to Asiatic cultures -- Visigoths in Spain, Ostrogoths in Italy, Magyars in Hungry, Huns in Germany/Poland/Czech, etc etc, and nomads are the one who traditionally consume lots of dairy.
            3. Potatoes come from the Americas, so obviously it's more prevalent in Europe since they colonized the Americas. Although, before the industrial revolution, European farming was far less sophisticated than Asian irrigation and farming, which meant they relied on the potato -- a crop known for its reliability and ability to survive bad weather -- much more.

            Travel doesn't instantly make one perceptive to other cultures, but it opens one's eyes. Slowly for the more close-minded people, but surely (and it accumulates). It gradually open one's eyes to new ideas, new ways of life, etc. Sure, it's not "the answer", but I do think it's "part of the answer"

          3. krytykkrytyk Post author

            Eastern Europe had an incredibly strong gathering culture which has remained to this day. Even to this day, entire families in Poland go out periodically to gather mushrooms and bilberries in thick forests. Some people are to this day gathering wild mint to re-plant it in their gardens to grow in order to have fresh self-made mint. Honestly, with the current food quality it's one of the best stuff you can eat or drink (especially wild berries).

          4. AoriiAorii

            That explains a bit why even in WW2 Russian troops could 'live off the land' while the Germans relied exclusively on supply lines xD

          5. krytykkrytyk Post author

            Well, the amount of supplies you can get that way is very limited, but I guess it would help you a little in survival. However, these things are all seasonal.

          6. AoriiAorii

            Slavs: racial bonus to Survival skill xD

            "A Russian can make a stove out of a pair of empty jerry cans. Our men only know how to warm themselves by burning precious petrol" -- some German doctor's war diary.

          7. Mizura

            haha@racial bonus

            On the matter of TCM: why yes, the Chinese claim boiled water is better for digestion. But traditional cures often result from observation. I suspect the mere observation that drinking boiled water made one much less prone to having an upset stomach, was what initially prompted the practice. In fact, another Chinese practice, that of a woman not bathing for a month after giving birth, is thought by some to have similar hygienic origins, to avoid water-based diseases. It's interesting that different regions have found very different methods of coping with water quality issues. In fact, the large variety of beers in Belgium was actually also initially to cope with poor quality and unhygienic water. This has since developed into a cultural trait.

            On the matter of traveling: although I do agree that traveling is a necessary condition for acquiring a more open mind, I basically don't believe it is a sufficient one. The colonial powers of old certainly didn't gain a sufficient appreciation of local cultures to bother preserving them. There is conservatism bias at work: you place higher value on what you have at hand than what you can gain in exchange. Kaede demonstrate this case quite well: so what if the world has magical means of cleaning? -it has no toilet!- And she is also quick to look down on Hyperion's 'inferior level of societal advancement', conveniently ignoring the fact that even in our world, we had two world wars a mere century ago, and a century of difference is surely insufficient to condemn a whole alternate world society as inferior. On the other hand, she doesn't appreciate that Hyperion has achieved what our modern society still hasn't: gender equality at the upper classes, not to mention some obviously superior medical treatment methods.

            Speaking of toilets, that remind me of how Westerners react in dismay when facing China's smelly, dirty, hole-in-the-ground public toilets, whereas Chinese people are absolutely scandalized when they realize that in many European countries, you have to pay to use the toilet. Some older Chinese actually Dislike the fact that all European toilets are sitting, as dirty toilets in China have instilled in them the instinctive belief that public sitting toilets are too dirty to sit on...

          8. AoriiAorii

            I have heard that Europe's alcohol culture comes from the fact that wine/beer was safer to drink than water from the well. Although I never figured out how/why that would even work since it's known that alcohol is a dehydrator (aka the drinker gets more thirsty).

            And you're right -- it takes a lot of factors for one to be open-minded and not judge other cultures based on our own perspective and experience. Honestly, I haven't even considered that Kaede as 'too judgmental' in some regards. And I think you're the first commenter to pick up on the possibility that Hyperion medical 'technology' might be more advanced than our own (even though they skipped basic biochemistry). I'm actually writing about Hyperion's grasp of mental health in v3ch9, and hopefully sometime this volume I'll get to cover the huge difference in criminal code that Kaede keeps misunderstanding.

            Now if you want true 'toilet humor' amusement, put a Chinese person in a traditional French bathroom (with its individual bidet that looks like a bowl-toilet with a faucet) and a French person on an Asian hole-in-the-ground toilet xD

          9. Zoo'oob

            Wine is a somewhat strong alcoholic drink, while beer is a very weak alcohol in comparison and has historically been used in place of barrels of water on ships. Barrels of water in the ships hold could apparently become biomes of bacteria, virus's, parasites, etc. and would shortly kill you after a drink. Thus the usage of beer as drinking water.

          10. krytykkrytyk Post author

            Wonderful, our ancestors were amazing people. We need to take example from them.

          11. Hakurei06Hakurei06

            Indeed, in honor of our ancestors (okay fine, your ancestors, mine are Asian), I'm going to brew some ale.

            The alcoholic content of beer wouldn't be enough to suppress bacterial activity on its own, but in combination with the presence of hops, and the fact that it already has a dominant culture, namely yeast, contributed to its generally longer shelf life.

  16. a shameless random

    Hello, can you upload v3 chapter 9 early? I've been called to join military training today, I'll probably go in 2-3 weeks. I honestly have no ideas how this volunteer thing works (yes, volunteer, that's what they called it), only thing I know is it'll be around 2 years before I'm reading this again and I seriously don't wanna wait that long to find out how people react to Sylv's episode (by people I meant Pascal and Kaede).

    I know this unreasonable and you risk getting more request, still no harm in asking rite? At least when I'm back there's infinity war waiting for me instead of me waiting for it huhu.

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    1. AoriiAorii

      Is the email you posted with a real one? I can send the alpha site url by email -- though I wouldn't normally recommend it to most people since, for some chapters, there's a lot of difference between alpha and release versions (and I wouldn't want readers' impressions to be tainted by the alpha).

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      1. a shameless random

        Yeah it's my main email. I'll be sure to get the details from the release versions after I'm back.

        Thank you very much :D

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  17. Zentirium

    Hmm so slow updates but high quality releases... Hope there's an update sooner or later.

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  18. taga basa

    hi im new here
    i enjoy reading daybreak , although i'm just a bit annoyed about pascal, particularly his arrogance. but it would be more exciting if what would he do, when Rhin-Lotharingei was suddenly invaded by the holy imperium legions.
    especially if kaeda suddenly vanish from his side, since i felt like the goddess kanon had an interest on her.

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    1. AoriiAorii

      uh...
      I don't think volume 3 prologue mentioned Kaede in any way ^^' No idea where you made the connection that Kanon is interested in her.
      There are a LOT of arrogant characters in this story xD Arrogance is a trait that comes with both high-class and competent people; so when a lot of the character are both aristocratic AND hypercompetent... ^^

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      1. taga basa

        well i agree with you, that Arrogance is probably a common trait among the nobility and i read a lot of information that the nobles in Medieval Europe are particularly prideful in their social status especially the French Knights.

        In regards with Kaede, Kanon probably sense her presence and i guess that she may either guide or use kaede.
        And also she did mentioned about a 3rd generation Worldwalker named Gwendolyn, who is probably an ancestor of Sylviane.

        and in regards to Pascal, i curious about his skills as a strategist. During Battle of Nordkapp he was able to counter Vagnsson's sudden attack on weichsel army right flank. i wonder what would he do if he encounter an enemy that are specialize in unconventional warfares like guerrilla tactics.

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      1. Zentirium

        I wanted to know beforehand since I have read a few before, see if it was a trap, scientific gender exchange or a magical one...

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        1. AoriiAorii

          Magic.
          Daybreak is a genderbender because (1) it was fun to write and (2) I wanted to explore gender roles in society.
          So yes, one of the main character gets magically genderswapped as part of the premise. Now, the sheer volume of psychological research I did to write it in a proper manner, combined with the flak I receive anyway for simply portraying it differently from what some imagine... I'm not sure I'd ever want to do it again ^^'

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          1. AoriiAorii

            They're updated when I deem a chapter sufficiently edited to be released =P
            I'm a quality over quantity person~

          2. Alir

            I like the quality so keep up the good work. Forget fast releases I would rather have a great story. By the way your approach to the Gender bender genre is one of the best I have read.

    1. AoriiAorii

      I do applaud/appreciate the time you took in drawing this. Although I'm pretty picky about artwork (me and the artist have been throwing stuff back and forth for months now xD). Regardless, as you were kind enough to draw here are some honest feedback ^^

      #1: Polish your lineart and detailing. I think you have much better lineart than your coloring technique (which despite the shading simply lacks depth and makes the drawing look flat). As a result this makes the lineart look flatter and I think your drawing would actually come out better in monochrome shading. The single-color eye looks like its absent of pupils, hollow, and looks downright inhuman, and such examples where the lack of finesse really make a difference could be seen scattered about. So work on your lineart and detailing first. Even a refined pencil sketch is far more appealing to look at than an average colored drawing.

      #2: Keep the character personality in mind when drawing. Their mannerisms, gestures, expressions, postures should reflect the person behind them. The first thing that struck me when seeing your image is that there is no way Kaede would ever take a pose like that -- that is not a posture that comes naturally to people, especially not one who grew up as a boy. Girls intentionally pose like that to accentuate their curves and only the flirtatious personalities ever develop a habit for such mannerisms (also looking 'sexy' just really doesn't fit Kaede's image). The first thoughts one should have in an image for Kaede should be "calm, relaxed, and cute enough to pet."

      #3: The image should fit the atmosphere and environment. I mean really, could you imagine an late Medieval or even a Enlightenment Era aristocrat wearing clothes that expose their belly button? Pascal would be scandalized to see her wearing such a thing. In the discussion in v1ch5, Ariadne felt scandalized when Kaede simply hinted at leaving the legs exposed under a short skirt. Yes Kaede's uniform did mention stockings, but they're suppose to overlap with the skirt to leave a minimum if any visible gap at all.

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      1. Mango Scribble

        Thanks alot for your feed back :)

        I have little experience drawing stuff like this, this is my first time drawing clothes onto a base and my second artwork ever that has a fully featured person. As for monochrome shading, I presume you meant shading with pencil? Such is impossible for me because it was made in Inkscape which is a vector program.

        I know well Kaede's personality, it was just I wanted to go for the more fan service appeal since most writers these days go for it xD. Also its not that I wanted to draw such short skirt, its my first time drawing skirts ever and they are hard to draw. I'm sorry but I can't change its pose because I drew over someone else's base and would need a completely new base. At most I can do is fix her uniform and expression.

        Thank you very much for your honest reply, I'll try my best to fix what I can :)

        edit: Here is what I got so far, what do you think?
        http://i.imgur.com/jtcHjqg.png

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        1. AoriiAorii

          It certainly fits better, and now her eyes just mildly concern me instead of creep me out xD
          Yeah by monochrome I mean pencil or shading using only grayscale toner. For anyone not an artist of professional quality, it tends to produce better-lookinged products (in my opinion at least)

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      2. Frog-kun

        "Yes Kaede's uniform did mention stockings, but they're suppose to overlap with the skirt to leave a minimum if any visible gap at all."

        And now I'm imagining it as a Zettai Ryouiki uniform. I approve.

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    1. AoriiAorii

      Oh right, some people actually read this... I thought I was amusing myself ^^'
      Added a bunch; tell me if anything is still missing =P

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      1. MochiMochi

        Thanks! I make it a habit to read everything so that I can get more sense of the story. The national profile of Weichsel was especially interesting.

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  19. Phillip

    One of the best stories I have read in a while, thanks. My only complaint is the slow release.

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  20. Lei

    Hi Aorii, thank you so much for this beautifully crafted and well-researched project. Truly an inspiration. If you can find a publisher and get it printed, I would buy it. You have brought this world, its characters, and its relationships to life (though my own preferences are screaming to see more of Pascal's rumored badassery as a Runelord. Hey, let's get him out of the HQ and into the fray! Hehe). And thanks to all the editors for their work on it as well, and Krytyk for hosting the project. One thing I noticed, though, is that you have been using "peaked" instead of "piqued" when talking about interest, as in "piqued her interest." The correct word to use is "piqued." It was a pleasure to read your work, and I hope to read more of it!

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    1. AoriiAorii

      I think people are going to get disappointed when (not if) I draw Pascal onto the front line. ^^' His 'Runelord' reputation does come from a set of circumstances that doesn't exist on a real battlefield.

      Thanks for the support, and on the note. I had to go through and re-examine my 'peaks'. Some of them were used correctly (as in, her interest went straight to the peak); some certainly were not.

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  21. azurekaito15

    Hi Aorii. I want to ask how long will Hyperion story go? less than 10 volume? more than 10 volume?

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    1. AoriiAorii

      Not sure? I really didn't plan that far ahead =P
      I have an ending envisioned, but I only brainstormed plans to volume 6 and it doesn't hit the ending.

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  22. Natris

    Hi Aorii, I liked the first two books. In my opinion there are some problems:
    -plot twists are too evident (and i suck at seeing plot twists normally) and clues (eg. betrayal by xxx, fake accusation...) are too easily understood by the protagonists.
    -you like the main group of characters too much. They are too good/clever/understanding. They also do not die.
    I love the world you have created, the magic system is interesting, descriptions are well done, but these two issues make the story rather... cliche/young adult. For some reason it reminds me Eddings :)
    Thanks and enjoy writing, will check out v3 when it is done :)

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    1. AoriiAorii

      Ouch! For someone who doesn't like YA, that really burns xD

      Plot twists, eh, based on the people I've talked about it seems to vary. I do hate plot twists that pop out of nowhere (it always strikes me as character/plot inconsistency) so I go out of my way to drop hints; perhaps too clearly for some. Of course, I'd be happy to hear why you think some twists were too expected and what you thought should of happened for better effect.

      As for the main character group, I don't believe in killing major characters before they've taken some time to develop and sink in. Lacks impact and wastes potential. Also, I'm fairly certain characters who are too clever/understanding is the antithesis of the YA genre ^^; given that genre's fame for angst galore rather than talking problems out and tolerating others' faults like mature adults.

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      1. Sydaen

        I must agree, though to defend Natris here, I would like to say that if in reference to the death of the father, Pascal's reactionary sequence felt a to me bit more like YA style angst rather than a deeply tragic angst. The essence felt refreshingly Socratic-Aristotelian tragic in the interim systematic deconstruction of character, and the style was very Vietnam-esque, but I feel like it spent unusually little in terms of the, for my lack of better phrasing, brushing-raising-of-the-head. Though, this does indeed make sense given the nature of the relation between Pascal and his father, as is naturally and often insurmountably directed by responsibility of status.

        Toward the interpreted twist, on my end I personally tend to enjoy logical sequence without direct construction of a hint—the sequence is logically most valid out when brought around, without a large-scale 'reveal', but with the elicitation of a response which retains rapidity, if I am not being too unclear, as I tend to. Yours is surprisingly quite close to what I wrote of, despite its top-layer initial similarity to a hint pattern.

        I might just be blabbering my cluttered recognitions though; it has been quite a while since I had read the second volume. I feel somewhat bad for making these statements without looking over the book again. If I had misinterpreted the end action as more of a inset reactive protraction than it was a proactively nuanced reaction this point does end up having little validity under my context, I suppose.

        Otherwise, a very enjoyable read for me, and I'm looking forward to the next book!

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        1. AoriiAorii

          "if I am not being too unclear, as I tend to"
          This is... in fact an extremely unclear response. The second paragraph was mostly one long run-on sentence that I can't even point out what it's trying to say. Meanwhile the key descriptive words in the first paragraph was "brushing-raising-of-the-head" which... uh, I have absolutely no clue what it means.

          "...more of a inset reactive protraction than it was a proactively nuanced reaction". I would argue that IF one's reaction to a close death within the family is 'proactively nuanced' even in private, one should be worried for their psych and humanity; because that's just not natural if the family was built upon any serious foundation of emotional attachment.

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          1. Sydaen

            Concerning the first part, don't pay me any mind, I guess. I believe it was not strictly a run-on, but that doesn't really matter anyhow. Now I'm digging my own grave by mentioning it and saying in the same breath that it doesn't matter.

            With the brushing-raising-of-the-head I attempted to describe, for my lack of ability, something of a tragic turn but found a couple questions in that it didn't seem like to me that there was an endeavor - it seemed that Pascal just sort of yelled at his problems, but there was a tragic turn in there somehow. I may almost certainly be wrong, though.

            On the nuance, I had meant to say that the nuance is more of a visibility thing from the perspective detail of the story as opposed to personal thought in nuance. As in, Pascal wouldn't be thinking in nuance, but his behavior might be outwardly nuanced. People don't usually tend to react straightforwardly to death in my experience, because to them, as far as I am aware, events seem to happen either extremely slowly or extremely quickly, both of which I feel like are somewhat bewildering to the person in question. Thoughts spin around in minds more than a couple times, and they usually end up distorted in one way or another.

            In the end, though, I most likely don't represent much of any portion of the readerbase, and my interpretations are, I guess, more selfish than most tend to be. If I sound offensive or belittling in any way, I apologize; I really don't mean to. I never seem to be able to get my specifics in without having some sorts of roundabout phrases that I have trouble distinguishing for connotation and denotation when I write just about anything. I do very much appreciate your efforts to piece together my nonsense. Thank you.

          2. AoriiAorii

            "People don't usually tend to react straightforwardly to death in my experience" that depends on the person, how mentally stable/confident they are, and what their experience with death is. Imbalanced/inexperienced minds may jump into a stage of shock or denial, while those who had met/seen death before have little trouble grasping its reality and move straight into the 'painful acceptance' phase. Keep in mind that Pascal is not only born into military expectations but also has taken part in battlefield action (noted at the start of the novel).

            Besides, everyone have different ways of expressing frustration/pain/outrage anyways. There is no one sized shoe that fits all.

            Personally, I find your expectation of human behavior to be rather skewed. Perhaps you've read/seen too many dramatizations and not enough real records? Don't know. I suggest mixing more documentaries, biographies, and memoirs into your media diet =P (There is after all, no 'wrong characterization' when reading about people's real experiences~)

    1. krytykkrytyk Post author

      Not sure what happened but the link was leading to a wrong file. Fixed it up. (though Aorii should double-check if the correct one was linked)

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  23. Adolf K Weismann

    Um Aorii-san....i had a question? Will kaede ever get accustomed to be a real "girl" mentally that is. And if thats true then is there any chance that it works out between Pascal and Kaede. I was just thinking. The generes include "ROMANCE(SLOW)". Umm...i was wondering which two people's romance. I hope you answer fast. I cant wait. Plus it is an excellent volume so far. Great work. Looking forward to next chapters.

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    1. AoriiAorii

      Humans survived by adapting to our environment; anyone placed in a scenario long enough will get used to it, and Kaede is better at emotional self-management than most.
      Who said the relationship with be the simple of two? At any rate, no spoilers. =P

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  24. WinterRED

    I just wanted to drop by and tell you how much I appreciate this LN. It has a fine balance between the familiar tastes of generic Japanese LNs and the refreshing concepts of an original.

    Keep up the great work and THANK YOU for releasing! Of all the LNs on BT, Hyperion is the one i look forwards to the most (and I follow like 15+ LNs there).

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  25. MochiMochi

    Is it just me or is there something wrong with volume 2 pdf file. Cant seem to make it work.

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  26. Absum

    Hey Aorii,

    Do you mind if I read unfinished chapters? I found the work site or whatever you call it by accident. It wasn't really hidden so I didn't think you'd mind but I still thought I'd ask.

    Apart from that I wanted to recommend putting Daybreak on some English web novel site if it isn't already. I don't actually know any but I think a more diverse group of readers, i.e. people not into light novels or history, would help with improving your writing. As far as I am concerned Daybreak is already quite well written, but I am not a exactly an experienced writing critic.

    I'll (try to) stop and go sleep now cause else I'm gonna keep thinking of things to add, maybe I'll give detailed thoughts on Daybreak some other time, maybe not. Either way I enjoy your work Aorii and I hope you enjoy writing it as well, that's pretty important after all!

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    1. AoriiAorii

      uh, I recommend against reading the work sites. Unfinished are unfinished for a reason ^^'
      I remember some site that I wanted to put Daybreak on but was having trouble with its formatting. Mmmmh. But hey, if you have recommendations, put them here P=

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      1. Absum

        I don't check the work site that often but regardless I do kinda enjoy seeing what you change, it helps me learn what I like and how well written something is. I enjoy slowly getting better analysing writing, even if I'm not all that good at it yet.

        I do not have any recommendations though, like I said, it's not actually a part of the internet I frequent. Really it sounds like you already did more research into it then me. That's good though, it was merely a suggestion for if you hadn't thought of it yet, although I did kinda expect you had considering you had also already looked into publishing and such.

        edit: Also I'd like to add I hate all of my own comments and I only managed to hit post on the first one cause it was 4 AM and I was very sleepy.

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    1. AoriiAorii

      *reads*
      Heh, Stanford Prison Experiment, someone did their research.
      It's got a good amount of philosophy, politics, and military mixed in it all. I do love it when writers back up fringe archetypes (sociopathic main character in this case) with serious psychological work. The problem is...
      This writing is really dry. Like, even Shirer's famous chronicle Rise and Fall of the Third Reich reads more like a narrative story than this. Not to mention its jarring prologue, full of ham-fisted background infodump. The writer's inexperience is really showing here.
      Plus "She looked less than 10 years old", petite girls are one thing, but having an actual child in such a scenario is... actually kinda disturbing.
      Honestly I'm not sure what to make of it.

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      1. Momonga-sama

        Its a Loli! Loli's are cute. Cuteness is justice. Thus, Lolis are justice~!
        xD
        Just kidding.

        I like the fantasy-military mixed in aspect in that novel and in yours too. While I admit that I do not have the literary skills/knowledge to appraise literature appropriately, to me Youjo Senki's seems to be well written (except for the info-dump in prologue). It would be better to judge the quality after reading more chapters but for now it does seem interesting.

        I hope you don't mind me commenting on your novel, I would like to say that there was one major area which bothered me. There were far too many characters who were described in a detailed manner. Normally, only the main characters would be well described (physical & psychological features). Thus I unfortunately stopped reading your (very entertaining) novel at the end of Vol-2, Chap-16.

        Anyway, thought you might be interested in Youjo Senki due to some similarities.

        (BTW: There is a new movie on Stanford Prison Experiment - http://www.imdb.com/title/tt0420293/)

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        1. AoriiAorii

          I quite welcome comments ^^
          Though this is the first time I've heard of someone being bothered by character descriptions... I mean, it's not like I continuously remind you of what they look like; it's usually only a paragraph or so during the introduction. Just skip past if you're not a visualization person (shrug). But seeing as first impressions are a really big deal when meeting people in real life, I like to paint an image in writing too.

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        2. Sonoda YukiSonoda Yuki

          I will have to disagree with you on this one, I personally like having more than just the "main" characters, well, characterized. It's one of the things that help bridge the gap between narrated sequences of events and awe-striking vistas of entire worlds

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          1. Momonga-sama

            Beyond a certain point, more data becomes info-dump, you know?!

            Anyway, just my personal opinion.

        3. Sanngrior

          you would probably not be a fan of the Halkegenia Online crossover between ZnT & SAO then.

          considering if you are just counting the number of characters that qualify as "main" with descriptions enough to match... the number exceeds 50 >.>

          the appeal in detailing more than the immediate main cast is it paints a better picture of what is going on, it pre-explains why certain events happen (appearance restricted behaviours or access, etc) like why a certain character will fail to catch another 'because they are too small/slow/slim to support such an action and so on. knowing some details about the rest of the characters lets you imagine a more canon rendition when you visualise the story.

          loli is one thing, that can range from 7-13/14 years depending, but a definitive 'below 10' in a psychological type situation... makes you a little apprehensive :S

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  27. Pedro Velôso

    I have not read the novel yet, but, am I the only one that noticed the reference to zero no tsukaima in the synopsis? Im gona read it just for that :3
    OBS: I apologise if that hurt the fellings of the autor

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    1. AoriiAorii

      All literary works are inspired by each other. Only a special snowflake will feel insulted by that ;)

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  28. Jay

    Does anyone know of any original stories that are as good as this? I've seen plenty of Japanese/Chinese, but I've yet to see many original English stories that give off such an epic feel to them. Any suggestions would be appreciated

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    1. Lilrfozzy

      Off the top of my head deathwolders on the HFY subreddit has this kind of scale and writing quality. simularities end there though.

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  29. pestanejando

    Hello, Aorii. I'm writing to you for I would like to ask 2 things. The first is, I live in Brazil (Neymar, Zico, futebol.. lol, just a joke) and have read through all of those chapters, and man, can't wait for the next. So as to not sit idle, I've thought of translating those into my beloved mother language, português (no, it's not espanhol... lol, here I go again), to share the same joy with my fellow brazilian friends, and soooo I just want to know if you would greenlight the project. I've thought of starting on AMA, but is's quite big, and a bigger group here has already started, though I have done 3 chapters of the first volume (IDK, maybe I'll be handing those to them :-) ). Btw, I've finished the first chapter of Daybreak to test how it would flow, but it needs some polishing yet, if you happen to want to take a look. And so it comes to my second question, I'm so sorry if it's too intruding, or if you find it inconvenient, but I'd like to know, have you agreed to the project, if you would have an email I could write to ask about some of the references for some facts, names, and similar data you used to write the novel, aside the footnotes and the extra info you wrote about and things I can find on the internet, of course. It would be kind of a last resort, just in case the references are too obscure or too ambiguous to find over the internet. In any case, I could just write through here, and either way it would be entirely up to you when you could answer. The project itself will progress almost at the same speed of your releases, maybe a little bit faster until I catch up. Well, that's it, thanks for the awesome job you've been doing. PS: If you please, could you add me to the list of beta readers, or tell me how could I aplly for it? Anyway, sorry for the long text and thanks for reading.

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    1. AoriiAorii

      If you want, I have no problem against it
      I'd be interested in seeing except I can't read Portuguese... and yes I know the Treaty of Tordesillas mapped Brazil to Portugal, unlike the rest of Latin America (see this is why history is a big deal! xD)
      If the email you entered alongside your comment is real, you should have received an email from me =P

      There isn't a 'beta-reader' application lol. I simply list those whose been providing detailed suggestions/feedback for me for a long time already. I start sending some of them drafts if they're interested, but note that being asked to read a lot of unfinished work (sometimes repetitively) makes the final reading experience less enjoyable =P

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      1. Pestanejando

        Oh, thanks for answering so fast!! So, for starters I think I'll start posting it on baka-tsuki, as soon as I finish reviewing the first chapter.

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  30. Lilrfozzy

    it feels like 1450s where real money is starting to come into Europe and they are able to really wake up from the metaphorical market crash that happened in the wake of the fall of Rome. Making me really want to see how you portray the world beyond the academy and if it will have the same dynamic of 'rich trader vs displaced nobility'. Although I imagine the inclusion of magic would mean the feudal lords would be able to permanantly lock everyone into their defined classes.

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      1. lilrfozzy

        Well I ended up comparing Earths history to the world in this fiction so I feel a little dumb. But essentially I was thinking about the ramifications of the continent bringing in a lot more money and trade goods from around the world. And a agrarian peasantry with more wealth to their name tends to upset the social order in feudal systems.

        Anyway this pretty much all stemmed from me binging a four hour podcast all night long and forgetting that Skaggen is the only nation that really has any colonial /global agenda as far as I know.

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        1. AoriiAorii

          Skagen and the Caliphate both have colonial agendas, hence mentions of their naval battles. But Skagen dominates the high seas. Meanwhile the Grand Republic of Samara controls cross-continent (Eurasia) land trade. But I don't think Europe got rich until it's well into the colonial era (late 1700s+). Prior to that, the GDP of the Far East and Indian subcontinent still dominated =P

          Only the 1st volume maintains that late medieval feel, hence I was wondering.

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          1. lilrfozzy

            Yeah, I had a couple misconceptions when I read through the later two volumes and failed to make any other assumptions. I gotta say that this is the first time I've read something like this where the author actually read some of Clausewitz and others works. Anyway I'll save some of my questions for later or on the nation profile so I don't pollute the homepage of this webnovel with my pesky curiosity.

  31. Prominis

    At first I thought this was pretty good, amusing and touching at times.
    Then I checked back and it said it was an original story. Immediately after, I slammed my face into a wall.

    And that is the best compliment I can manage. Alternatively... great work?

    P.S. Face slamming was out of shame because I attempt writing, but I'm nowhere near as competent, nor have I ever managed to finish an entire novel/full arc, despite throwing down weeks of time onto one piece.

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    1. Prominis

      Just an extension because in hindsight, after reading the novel 3-4 more times over in the past 24 hours, I believe my comments were rather rude. I would blame a lack of sleep for the useless comment, but that would be rather irresponsible.

      I would like to clarify: I personally find blind compliments with no basis dull and reminiscent of flattery. Thus, I consider them, for the most part, useless. That being said, I would like to say that Daybreak on Hyperion has a startlingly large amount of foresight put into it, from the characters' names to bits and pieces all around. It seems thoroughly thought out, in ways that are both amazing and horrifying at the same time; it is amazing in sheer quantity and quality, and horrifying in the amount of research that must have been done.

      The characters develop, and seem to grow on their own over the course of the story. The plot thickens and becomes more and more enrapturing as time goes on. With that initial concept/hook, Daybreak could have been a simple slice of life at an academy, but instead it became a continent-wide game of thrones. I would applaud the depth, but at this point I feel that the praise has gone too far. It's almost ironic; in excess compliments are fake, whereas too few are unfaithful. Moreover, I don't believe sound files can be put here, nor do I believe anyone would actually want to listen to clapping alone.

      That being said, Daybreak on Hyperion is a wonderful story, and I hope you're proud of what you've written. English light novels are a rather rare commodity, after all.
      ... Or should I say good ones are? There are bound to be a huge amount on the internet, in the form of fanfiction, parodies, and the like.

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      1. AoriiAorii

        Wow, that is a lot of praise D=
        But I thank you for the details; it helps to know which parts people approved of (even if readers disagree).
        I've always been proud of taking the story away from just another 'military academy romcom'. That being said, the expansion in scale has created its own problems -- too much info to introduce/discuss and never enough time, so many readers either find the details they want lacking or coming too late.
        Though... I call Daybreak a 'light novel' for simplicity's sake. I don't follow many of the conventions that identify 'light novels' as a genre though. It's a hybridized mix between that and standard western novelization.

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  32. no one

    i would like to know how frequently do you update this??
    and if you plan on translating another novel can you take kyuuketsu hime into consideration?

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    1. AoriiAorii

      Recently? around once a month since I've been fairly busy. Hopefully winter will speed that up some.
      No I'm not picking up any other projects at the moment; besides, Krytyk is the translator on this site; I write Daybreak.

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      1. no one

        is that so :o well its always a pleasure reading your work i can say with confident that this is one of my fav light novels the plot is quite balanced its not rushed .keep up the good work senpai~

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  33. Ein

    I really love your work Aorii. If you publish this novel on playstore or apple store, I will buy it.
    Please keep up the good work.

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      1. AoriiAorii

        So I've heard.
        My plan was to submit the book to a few publishers to try out first. Except I haven't really had the time to tackle the requirements needed. Maybe during the holidays this year...

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        1. Ein

          Amazon ebook requires kindle, is it not? And Amazon also requres US credit card, which I do not have. I may use giftcard instead, but what is the point of paying your credit card company if you cannot use your credit card. Please also publish in playstore or apple store. At least, they accept non US credit card.

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          1. Zhalfirin

            You can convert Kindle format ebooks into epub and other formats fairly easily, I've done so multiple times. As for payments on Amazon, they should accept any major card (Visa, MasterCard, etc) irregardless of the nation that it is issued in.

        2. gloom

          How about translating this to japanese then post it in narou ? I'm thrilled to see english made original story compete there.

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  34. Darkmark8910

    WOW!!!

    Okay, Aorii, I -have- to say.

    This is remarkably well-done! I didn't even know this wasn't translated from a big Japanese light novel company until I checked Baka Tsuki to look for similar novels (I very much enjoy this; I'm an accountant, anthropologist, and poly-sci junkie ^.O). Then I went "Oh, wow, this isn't translated from a Japanese work?!" and became amazed!

    You're doin' a wonderful, terrific job. Keep up the good work!

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  35. x10aBankai

    Hey I'm a new user on ur site and was wondering if u have a specific order in which u translate or do u just jump from story to story depending on ur mood

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    1. krytykkrytyk Post author

      I have a set order I decide beforehand, but that depends largely on my mood.

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    2. Sonoda YukiSonoda Yuki

      Putting aside the fact that this would be better suited to either one of the blog posts or the about page, the real question is why he's asking this on a project page, specifically a non-translation project page, whose content is provided by Aorii, not Krytyk or any other translator. I'm not upset or anything, just perplexed.

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  36. Sonoda YukiSonoda Yuki

    On a scale of Yahoo's Babel fish to Adam's, How accurate is Pascal's auto-translation magic? Comm ring? Implant?

    And have I already asked you this question? Because I don't remember, but I've got a minor case of déjà vu, typing this.

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    1. AoriiAorii

      Seeing as it actually links Pascal and Kaede's knowledge/memories and tries to translate based on what they already know, it's more sophisticated than any translation tool we have.
      So... magic =P

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  37. MochiMochi

    It seems that there isn't a comment section for Volume 3 Chapter 3. Is this intentional or just some glitch or bug?

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    1. krytykkrytyk Post author

      I'm looking into it, probably something related to the recent wordpress update.

      Update: found the responsible update in recent 4.3 wordpress release.

      "Comments turned off on pages – All new pages that you create will have comments turned off. Keep discussions to your blog, right where they’re supposed to happen." Is what they wrote -_-.

      Fixed now.

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